Female Name: Raven-This name I like to keep for "Evil Bitch" kinds of characters. If the story needs me to be a bitchy head cheerleader, dominatrix or anyone else of a generally evil self centered disposition then Raven is the girl for the job.
Dawn (Though Raven is my main, I also have a soft spot for Dawn, so I'll be happy to see how people use her)- Dawn is the innocent character. I like to think of her as the naive nymphomaniac, the kind that doesn't know how much she will enjoy her new body until she has some experience that shows her how awesome it is to be a girl. You don't necessarily need to use her that way though, it's just a suggestion that I know will push my buttons, she would also do well as any other kind of submissive character.
My Character somehow starts out as a plain woman with little or no distinguishing features and so goes around stealing general attractiveness and/or slutty/bitchiness from characters she encounters, this can be intentional or unintentional (After Being Turned into a Girl Obviously).
My thought was that men tend to be envious of material things they'd like to possess, like huge TV's, fancy cars, bikini model girlfriends, etc .. Women tend to be envious of other women's situations and their insecurities about their body. Along that line, I figured that I could follow the "stealing attributes" path that Raven had requested without making it a 'willing" caption, allowing me to use her submissive character.
From there, I just wrote out what I wanted to do .. and ended up with this:
I thought the execution was ok, but it was a bit of a clunker in a few ways. First off, while she said she didn't mind lactation, she didn't specifically say she liked pregnancy. That tends to be a deal breaker for some people and I didn't want the caption to fail just because of that. The main reason though was that I wasn't sure I wanted Dawn to offer any resistance, which is what the caption implies, that she has figured out what is happening and is trying to stop the inevitable.
I decided that I wanted to resolve the caption in a different way. I was happy with everything but the last two lines of text, which meant that I had to figure out an ending with a real economy of words to get it done. For me, I needed to use words sparingly and make them count. I went back and figured that making her Raven might be the best way to solve that, but HOW could I make her bitchy? Using guy logic ... Midol = period = instant bitch! Once I figured that out, it was just a case of rearranging and making sure the flow of the last 2 lines worked properly and eliminating anything superfluous.
In the end, reworking it made it a better caption, and one that fit in with her preferences much better than the original, once I figured out a way to put her preferences to best use. They didn't click for me when I started, but once I had something created, everything seemed to fall into place.
DISCUSSION QUESTION: Because this is a TG caption blog, and most of the readers are fans of TG, we all seem to be envious of different aspects of womanhood. What are some things that women should be envious of men? In other words, why would a woman want to be a man?