Wednesday, June 1, 2011
From the Mouths of Babes
Been busy since I've been on vacation (since Friday afternoon). Though I was able to make a few captions, I didn't feel motivated enough to make a posting here. Also, I am quite enjoying my recent run of captions, and since I want to post most of them, I figured a few days distance would give me the space I need to be more objective about what worked and didn't work. Hope you didn't miss me TOO much!
Anyway, the above caption is the one that I posted to Rachel's Haven as a payback for a lengthy caption series from Davewashere25. What made it so cool was that he used the basis of this blog as a stepping off point, so it had a realistic feel to it. I wanted to give him something in return that hit some major buttons, as I am not usually one for creating epic mini-series. I can do a great job of showing what is happening "in the moment".
In the past, I've turned Dave into a little girl, as a former husband was cuckolded by his wife, who became pregnant from another man. I wanted to do another caption where I went at it with a different angle in using a conversation between a daughter and Dave's wife. I don't recall too many captioners using that device before, and it made sense to me that it could/would be a humiliating experience for him. The daughter's innocence could be played as well, since the mom would then have to explain things ... and children in general are clueless when it comes to anything of a sexual nature, especially fetishes. They also tend to be painfully honest and without social filters.
I had that idea floating around in my head for a day or two, but it felt a bit off. I wasn't sure I could pull it together with a picutre that went well. THEN I found the picture I used in the caption. It felt much better to me that there wasn't a child in the photo AND it seemed perfect in that, the parents were switching places and seemed to be getting ready to head out somewhere.
When i was a child, I can recall my mom getting ready to go out on a Saturday Night and it was a time of apprehension and wonder. My parents were going out and I was in the hands of an old aunt. Would I ever see them again? An entire night seems like forever to a child. It also was a moment of transformation, as my mom, who I mostly saw dressed in comfy clothes, would become this glamorous image of femininity, towering over me in heels (though she was only 5' tall) and wearing a dress with perfect makeup and hair. My dad usually put on a nice dress shirt and slacks, though he waited until 5 minutes before they left to shave since he always had heavy stubble.
From there, it was just fleshing out the story. I took some liberties with his preferences, which he usually doesn't mind because I guess he likes getting captions from me, which I consider an honor. It is obvious in the picture that the blond is stunning, confident, and smitten with her image in the mirror. That made me decide that Dave was definitely a crosdresser, albeit one that was hiding it from his wife. He doesn't list that in his preferences, but I felt that if it was well written, he wouldn't mind that much.
The main point I wanted to get was that Dave was going to be outed by his daughter, innocently of course, which would set up further situations for him down the road. I also wanted to show that his wife could go from 0 to Bitch in about 5 seconds flat, further establishing the trouble that Dave was soon to be heading into. My original caption didn't quite show that as much though. Here is the original and below I will talk about why I went from this to what was posted above.
One is that I clearly didn't specify enough of what was going to become of Dave. Having Clarissa say that Dave could be home everyday as Dani made it a bit clearer what was going to happen. In the original it was left a bit fuzzy. Here you can see the finality in what Daddy Kim is thinking.
Another thing was I didn't want to make the text any smaller, and since Clarissa is a child, I figured the best way to gain some space was to reduce her font size. It works because it sets the speakers apart even further.
Lastly, I want to tie everything up into a nice clean bow. The last line in the original .. you really weren't sure if Daddy Kim was mad or being playful. I wanted to drive home the situation as it pertained to what was going to be happening with Dave (and I can only imagine what happened to him there at the party!) For that I wanted to tie in something from my own real life. I have been separated from my daughter's mother for at least 14 years now. I technically have custody, but she does stay with her mom from time to time. Its always "our daughter" when she does something awesome, but when she misbehaves, it is always "YOUR daughter just set her teacher on fire!" I always found that line of reasoning amusing, and played off of that to create the stinger at the end.
(Damn this is quite a long posting. Whew!) All this, plus probably other things I forgot to mention, made this caption what it was. The irony is that I am not a huge fan of crossdressing captions, but some of the favorites I've created have come from this genre. I guess it could be that since I don't dabble in it too often, it seems fresh to me? Or maybe I like them more than I let on? That is for another discussion I guess.
DISCUSSION QUESTION: Does the interplay between the mom and daughter seem genuine? If you were to be outed as a TG caption fan or crossdresser, who would be the most embarrassing person to be outed in front of? What could make the situation even worse? Lots of questions I know, but hey, I haven't posted in a week! What did you think of the caption overall and did the changes I made make it better? worse or the same?