Saturday, June 23, 2012

A Shortcut with something extra!

I made this back in January while on painkillers. Looking at it now, its more coherent than I thought it was back when I posted it for Chrono180. Yeah. it goes by REAL fast, but it does go from point A to point B in a straight line. I wish I could've had a bit more room to put in how the hell he got into a dressing room, but I would hope that most people would read that any "Asian mall store" with a perfume counter would probably have a women's clothing department.

Just looking at it again, I now realize WHY people didn't get the connection I was trying to imply between the Haiku perfume and the final "zinger' at the end. URRGGHH, apparently I can't count when I'm buzzing on pain meds. I had too many syllables in the 1st line for people to properly read it as a friggin' haiku! Eessh! Yes, I know its corrected NOW because I am posting a corrected version.



I will update this section as needed throughout the weekend as little thoughts pop into my head. I might make this a standard weekend thing if it works out well. Keep checking back in here!

Congrats to Caitlyn-Masked on getting the initials RN after her name. I KNEW she could do it.

Welcome to all of the new people that have joined here recently. I think this MIGHT have been the biggest week for newbies with ummm 5 people joining I think!

If you HAVEN'T JOINED yet ... why not?

Realfield joins the list of captioners leaving our community for a bright hew future! We'll miss you BUT I am so glad that you got to leave on your terms and I hope you have a wonderful life ahead!

YES, I probably stole this style of writing from Larry King!

Today is the last day for submissions for the Haven Quarterly Issue IV. I believe we are over 110 pages right now. It is going to be a humongous issue jammed packed with stories, articles and LOTS of TG captions. I'll have more to say about it in a week or two when it'll be available.

ALECTRA made it out of her first year of college, which I assume means she'll be cranking out a bunch of captions she's probably owed for awhile now!

If you have a trading folder at Rachel's Haven and haven't made a trade caption in awhile, THIS is the best time to make some new ones. We will be doing another housecleaning in 2 weeks or so and moving inactive people from the main folders. Its also a good time if you are INACTIVE to make some captions and get out of caption debt. I LOVE moving people back up to the active area!

A HAIKU in English is pretty much a 'poem' set up in 3 lines .. the first contains 5 syllables, the second has 7 syllables, and then the last line uses 5 syllables .. which is the correct way to do it in the above caption!


DISCUSSION QUESTION: Be truthful, did you see the connection between the name of the perfume "Haiku" and how her quote was phrased? If so, was it too subtle, or was the lack of a large amount of text make you think it was just a breezy little caption? If you want to comment on any of the little Dee-briefings, or give me something to post there, the comment section is right below!


  1. Ahhhh I love a good Haiku Dee! I used to write them all the time in highschool during math class. Great job, I enjoyed it.

  2. Okay first congrats to Caitlyn ;P

    Second I've never done a Haiku, even when I know that it's related to the seasons... Some Japanese lover I'm haha

    Third, just finished my first year of University! Yay for me, it was a blast! Already waiting for the second year hehe So I'm writing once again, but I need proofreading and Kyra is occupied at the moment, so maybe it will take sometime ;)

    Fourth The EZine looks bigger than ever, and I've contributed a twitter story, with all the interactive elements that support Twitter... and there is my hint *giggle* And another juicy story related to bad girls, because everyones knows that I'm a really bad one *giggle*

    Ouh and Realdfield goes away? O.o I'll miss him!

    Hugs and Kisses Alectra

  3. To be fair, writing a Haiku whilst under the influence of powerful painkillers is the sort of amazingly cool thing that only you would try! If it was me, I'd have probably wimped out. This is pretty impressive and I did notice the connection, but only because I have an interest in poetry.

  4. To be honest, I don't remember how a Haiku is formatted. I remember it had something to do with either the number of words per line or the number of syllables per line... but I just don't know. When I read the name of the perfume I just went ahead and assumed that you used an Haiku somewhere in the text. Great cap though... it has a stunning image, great layout and built in humor. In other words, a Dee cap if I've ever seen one!

    I like the idea of your Dee-Briefs. In the spirit of putting out a lot of information I'll comment on all of them in short as well:

    YAY ME!, Yay new people!, Geez... join up already, Realfield leaving is both sad and happy, Don't steal too much for Larry... he retired after all, the eZine is going to be great, WOO HOO WTG Alectra!, Being an active trader on the Haven is always cool.

    1. Thank you Caitlyn ;P

      and thank you Dee, but btw Its Alectra, Alektra (blue) is this one:

      Apart from that there is no biggie difference in there haha ;)

      Hugs and Kisses Alectra

  5. Well, Alectra .. perhaps I wanted to make sure you had enough Potassium in your diet?!?

    I'm only looking for your best interests at heart, which is why I gave you a K instead of a C!

  6. I like the caption. It's a great Dee-caption. However I didn't know what a 'Haiku' was until you mentioned it in this post and I searched for it at Wiki.

    Congrats Alectra ^_^